Your opinion on my poem, do you like it??

I think everyone would hear me better if I didn't talk at all,


instead of moans and groans of pain just hear the tear drops fall.


Perhaps if I said nothinig, they'd hear my voice more clearly,


if there were no word to be heard, they'd listen more then merely.


Ear shattering silence, echoing voice so meager,


no matter how quiet, they'll never hear me-so why am I so eager?


My words don't mean a thing, not matter what I don't say,


I don't care how large the cost, for silence I will pay.


I want to yell, I want to scream, I want to let them know,


but I can't find my voice, I wish it'd tell me where to go.


Silence is so loud, when there's nothing there to hear,


serenity and peace, pounding in my ear.


Silence isn't simple, a very complex case,


just keep running to catch up, a marathon sprinter's pace.


Seal your mouth, bite your tongue, keep it very still,


don't want the volcano to explode, a vocabulary spill.

Your opinion on my poem, do you like it??
Nice poem. It creates some great imagery. I don't know if you intended to space it out the way it's showing, but you might want to look at where you begin each line for more effect, but again, it may be how yahoo posted it and not how you wrote it.
Reply:It's good.. different, some may say depressing and alot of folks don't care for that sort of stuff, but yes it's better than ok, keep adding on to it..
Reply:I love your poem.


There are poetry contests.


Maybe you should enter in one??
Reply:wow i love it! go to


www.rythemzone.com to share!
Reply:I really like it! You are a good poet- keep it up!
Reply:Moving and sad. Just the way I like them. I like the way your writing keeps improving. In reading your work it's hard to believe you are as young as you are. You have a very bright future.
Reply:I like it, its really good, but its sad :(





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Reply:wateve life goes on suck it up
Reply:that is amazing.


seriously.


you should enter in a contest


or even get it published. maybe not yet in a whole book for you but i'm sure theres got to be a book that allows you to send in poetry.


wow.


!!!!!!