Can someone give me a title for this and your opinion

I’ll sleep when I’m dead


There’s no time to waste


When nothing’s left to be said


And our demons are faced


We cast our fears away to the wind


And beg forgiveness for we know we have sinned





In our time of woe and despair


We look to the skies for a gleam of light


In our hearts we feel a lonely stare


That casts our souls into night


For when love is gone or seems lost


We feel we have paid the ultimate cost





And in my life I’ve felt this hurt


And though it brings you down


I’m more cautious and alert


For although this pain is renown


In time you come to heal


From the pain you now feel





In our darkest hour


In the blackest bight


We somehow find our strength and power


To win our demonic fight


We set ourselves free


From the evils blessed be





So I live my life


From demon to demon


Through all the strife


To be a freeman


And look for good in a world gone bad


And try to hold on to what I once had.
















Can someone give me a title for this and your opinion
I don't know what to call it, but I thought it was pretty and sad. You are a really good poet.
Reply:In my opinion the title should be "That's Life"or "The Reality"....


My comments..The poem is very good. Its bring a big message to all the people in the world. Keep on. GBU.
Reply:"Mirror" would be a good title for this.
Reply:Only two negative comments:


I don't believe the line that ends in "renown" fits the rhythym


and "free man" rather than "freeman"





other than that it's great, it makes me think of a witch coven in mourning for one of their own after the witch trial ends....





I think in part this is a spell or curse.
Reply:I'll sleep when I'm done.





Sounds like a good title. I only say this because most poems are titled by the first line. Plus you talk about a lot of things that are to happen mainly after you are doing living far as the afterlife. So I pretty much think that sums it up nicely. Up to you though. P.S. or if you really want to be creative just leave it Untitled. I know a lot of poets who have just plainly left their peoms called Untitled because either they just couldn't match a good title or just liked it untitled.
Reply:i would call the poem demons. i thought it was a wonderful poem with a lot of emotion. you are a great poet. keep it up.